Hey Readers,
This week our task was to write a narrative story with the animal problem picture that you have chose.This task was a quite interesting task but so hard but I managed to finish in the right time. Our WALT : write a narrrative story with a clear beginning, middle and end.
Once upon a time there was a fluffy dog named Williams. He is a helpful guy with a kind heart. His bright eyes make people attracted towards him. When other animals are sad he appears and he makes them feel happy and they talk to him.He has white brown skin. His paws are tiny as turtles legs. He likes going on many adventures, especially cold and icy places. He once went to the mountain but his paws froze so he crept into the car and he tried to snuggle in between the soft leather seat. After a while when he had warmed up he tried to get out from the comforting cushion but he got stuck. He didn’t know what to do so he made a loud squelch sound which made the owner stop the car. At that stage Williams was petrified and exhausted from wriggling vigorously in order to free himself from the jaws of the cold cushion. His owner got out of the car and opened the back seat door and yanked williams out of the crunchy cushion and set him free. That’s why he never sits in the back seat. He felt relieved and happy.
THE END :)
Hi Jashavaa
ReplyDeleteMis Bunting here. I enjoyed reading your narrative you definitely met the brief you had a clear beginning, middle and end. I liked the 'extra adjectives' you used to set the scene and describe William. I wonder which part of the problem you would add an extra complication to if you had the chance to rework this story?
Hi Miss Bunting,
DeleteThank You. I don't know what to add and I had a short amount of time to finish so I couldn't think of adding anymore.